Introduction to The Car was Messy

The next piece I chose was “The Car was Messy” which I wrote about four weeks into the quarter. It showed my ability to be descriptive and shows the reader what I’m talking about with just saying the car was a mess. Instead I said” When I opened the door I was immediately tackled by a stuffed bear, moldy sandwiches, and college books.” After doing this, it helped me realize that I had to be more descriptive to make my writer care more.